Overall, I’m pleasantly surprised by your infographic Mailin, particularly given how apprehensive you appeared to be in your last tutorial before this submission. There is a level of success in your work that does present the audience with a level of information too – Made slightly harder by your ‘left-field’ and personal topic. There is a good choice of font and an appropriate use of music too. However, there are a series of issues that I would like you to consider;
1) Animation: Your task was to convey information in a fun and engaging way but instead your film feels slighty ‘pedestrian’ and ‘mechanical’ in places. For example the ‘the helicopter’ scene is set up and then nothing really happens. You set up the scene but never gave us an animated punch-line. There are also problems with the logic and use of language in your script;
A) “I left you an Easter present” – Why Easter? Irrelevant. B) “If my running would inspire you…you can finally lose some weight” – Why doesn’t my exercises inspire you?.....To run and lose weight! C) “I need wine and chocolate…not bloody carrots” (why need?) – I want wine & chocolate….not bloody carrots.
The fox scene I don’t quite understand either… where does this fit in the ‘pets’ line up? Yes you can have a pet fox but generally speaking these are wild and the joke here is that banning fox hunting leads to a fox having a nice dinner? That doesn’t quite make sense, at least in as much as you mean ‘good I won’t be killed so now I can eat more’. This doesn’t quite have comedic logic, relevancy, or the simplicity of your other statements.
2) Graphic Design: There is a ‘scrap book’ feel to the way in you’ve used graphic design in this project. Simply put your design style is slightly mismatched. The cat is ‘Simon’s Cat’ inspired, your fish is more children’s illustration, and your rabbit feels more ‘traced’ than designed. There is mixed success in the way in which you’ve staged your scenes, for example the spider scene works due to its simplicity, placement, and good design however the rabbit scene is less successful because of its use of the edge of the screen. You should avoid doing this with characters because it makes the audience aware of the frame, can be clipped (look up TV Safe Area), and is generally graphically unappealing.
Overall, I’m pleasantly surprised by your infographic Mailin, particularly given how apprehensive you appeared to be in your last tutorial before this submission. There is a level of success in your work that does present the audience with a level of information too – Made slightly harder by your ‘left-field’ and personal topic. There is a good choice of font and an appropriate use of music too. However, there are a series of issues that I would like you to consider;
ReplyDelete1) Animation: Your task was to convey information in a fun and engaging way but instead your film feels slighty ‘pedestrian’ and ‘mechanical’ in places. For example the ‘the helicopter’ scene is set up and then nothing really happens. You set up the scene but never gave us an animated punch-line. There are also problems with the logic and use of language in your script;
A) “I left you an Easter present” – Why Easter? Irrelevant.
B) “If my running would inspire you…you can finally lose some weight” – Why doesn’t my exercises inspire you?.....To run and lose weight!
C) “I need wine and chocolate…not bloody carrots” (why need?) – I want wine & chocolate….not bloody carrots.
The fox scene I don’t quite understand either… where does this fit in the ‘pets’ line up? Yes you can have a pet fox but generally speaking these are wild and the joke here is that banning fox hunting leads to a fox having a nice dinner? That doesn’t quite make sense, at least in as much as you mean ‘good I won’t be killed so now I can eat more’. This doesn’t quite have comedic logic, relevancy, or the simplicity of your other statements.
2) Graphic Design: There is a ‘scrap book’ feel to the way in you’ve used graphic design in this project. Simply put your design style is slightly mismatched. The cat is ‘Simon’s Cat’ inspired, your fish is more children’s illustration, and your rabbit feels more ‘traced’ than designed. There is mixed success in the way in which you’ve staged your scenes, for example the spider scene works due to its simplicity, placement, and good design however the rabbit scene is less successful because of its use of the edge of the screen. You should avoid doing this with characters because it makes the audience aware of the frame, can be clipped (look up TV Safe Area), and is generally graphically unappealing.